Water use in six countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #2, band 6.5

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213 words. Marked by Axiom on 16 April 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The table this answer describes

Water use in six countries (IELTS Task 1 table) (m³)
	Domestic	Agricultural	Industrial
Australia	341	741	276
Canada	279	1,238	832
China	26	806	71
Russia	98	1,863	56
Turkey	80	1,482	731
UK	38	810	398

Values in m³.

Academic Task 1213 words

The table gives information for water used for three sectors in 6 different countries.

The table illustrates the quantities of water consumption across three sectors—domestic, agricultural, and water—in six different countries, measured in cubic meters. Overall, all countries significantly used more water in the agricultural sector compared to household and industrial sectors. It is also clear that Canada notably outstrips overall water usage, whereas China used the least.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, all countries used more water in the agricultural sector than in the domestic and industrial sectors.
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Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedIt is also clear that Canada has the highest overall water usage, whereas China uses the least.
Maintained consistent tense usage.

Russia stood out as the country with the highest agricultural water usage, with a staggering 1863. Following some way behind were Turkey (1482) and Canada (1238). The other countries—the UK (810), China (806), and Australia (741)—in contrast, used considerably less water—nearly double that of the leading nation.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedRussia had the highest agricultural water usage at 1863 cubic meters.
Removed subjective language and clarified the measurement unit.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedTurkey (1482) and Canada (1238) followed behind.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedThe UK (810), China (806), and Australia (741) used considerably less water, nearly half of what Russia used.
Corrected the comparison to accurately reflect the data.

In terms of industrial water use, Canada and Turkey again led the chart, with 832 and 731, respectively. The UK and Australia followed at a distance, with their respective figures of 398 and 276. Lastly, lagging far behind were China (71) and Russia (56), with the latter recording the lowest among this group.

Lexical resource
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RevisedLastly, China (71) and Russia (56) had the lowest industrial water usage, with Russia being the lowest.
Clarified the comparison for better understanding.

In the domestic sector, nearly all countries utilized water at a lower level of magnitude, with Australia being an outlier, topping the list at 341 cubic meters, closely followed by Canada at 279. The remaining countries ranked in descending order: Russia (98), Turkey (80), the UK (38), and China, which stood at the bottom with just 26 cubic meters.

Lexical resource
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RevisedIn the domestic sector, water usage was generally lower, with Australia as an outlier at 341 cubic meters, followed by Canada at 279.
Simplified and clarified the sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedThe remaining countries ranked in descending order: Russia (98), Turkey (80), the UK (38), and China at the bottom with 26 cubic meters.
Simplified the sentence for better readability.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized with a clear structure, but there are some inconsistencies in the comparisons and descriptions.

Suggestions

Ensure consistency in comparisons across sectors.
Clarify the overall comparison of water usage among countries.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, all countries used more water in the agricultural sector than in the domestic and industrial sectors.
Simplified the sentence for clarity.
RevisedRussia had the highest agricultural water usage at 1863 cubic meters.
Removed subjective language and clarified the measurement unit.
RevisedThe UK (810), China (806), and Australia (741) used considerably less water, nearly half of what Russia used.
Corrected the comparison to accurately reflect the data.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with some minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedIt is also clear that Canada has the highest overall water usage, whereas China uses the least.
Maintained consistent tense usage.
RevisedTurkey (1482) and Canada (1238) followed behind.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedThe remaining countries ranked in descending order: Russia (98), Turkey (80), the UK (38), and China at the bottom with 26 cubic meters.
Simplified the sentence for better readability.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some expressions could be more precise or varied.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedOverall, all countries predominantly used more water in the agricultural sector than in the domestic and industrial sectors.
Replaced 'significantly' with 'predominantly' for precision.
RevisedRussia had the highest agricultural water usage at 1863 cubic meters.
Removed subjective language for objectivity.
RevisedLastly, China (71) and Russia (56) had the lowest industrial water usage, with Russia being the lowest.
Clarified the comparison for better understanding.
RevisedIn the domestic sector, water usage was generally lower, with Australia as an outlier at 341 cubic meters, followed by Canada at 279.
Simplified and clarified the sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and provides a clear overview of the data, but some comparisons could be more accurate.

Suggestions

Ensure all comparisons accurately reflect the data.
Provide a clearer summary of overall trends.

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