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Water use in six countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #1, band 5.5

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173 words. Marked by Axiom on 14 January 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The table this answer describes

Water use in six countries (IELTS Task 1 table) (m³)
DomesticAgriculturalIndustrial
Australia341741276
Canada2791,238832
China2680671
Russia981,86356
Turkey801,482731
UK38810398
Values in m³.

Academic Task 1173 words

The table gives information about water use in three sectors in six different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the distribution of water cubic metres (m^3) in 3 different sectors in six countries namely: Australia, Canada, China, Russia, Turkey and the UK. Overall , it is clear that agricultural water usage is the dominant in all six countries , while the domestic water usage is the lowest in most countries .

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedChina’s total water usage is the least, while Canada’s is the most.

    Corrects punctuation errors.

China’s water usage in domestic and industrial sectors was the least with 26 and 71 m^3 respectively.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedAustralia uses 341 m^3 of water domestically, the highest among the six countries, but its agricultural usage is the lowest at 741 m^3.

    This revision streamlines the sentence for better readability and coherence.

However, their industrial water usage was the highest among all countries. The UK’s usage of water was moderate in Agricultural sector and Industrial sectors, but domestic water usage was 38 m^3 ,being the second least.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedRussia and Turkey have low domestic water usage, ranging from 80 to 98 m^3, but their industrial usage is among the highest.

    This revision corrects the incomplete sentence and improves logical flow.

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Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking between ideas.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Improve the flow between sentences.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, agricultural water usage is dominant in all six countries, while domestic usage is generally the lowest.

    This revision improves clarity and coherence by connecting ideas more smoothly.

  • RevisedAustralia uses 341 m^3 of water domestically, the highest among the six countries, but its agricultural usage is the lowest at 741 m^3.

    This revision streamlines the sentence for better readability and coherence.

  • RevisedRussia and Turkey have low domestic water usage, ranging from 80 to 98 m^3, but their industrial usage is among the highest.

    This revision corrects the incomplete sentence and improves logical flow.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex structures.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedChina’s total water usage is the least, while Canada’s is the most.

    Corrects punctuation errors.

  • RevisedRussia and Turkey have some of the lowest domestic water usage, ranging from 80 to 98 m^3.

    Corrects grammatical structure.

  • RevisedThe UK’s water usage was moderate in the agricultural and industrial sectors, but its domestic usage was 38 m^3, the second lowest.

    Improves sentence structure and punctuation.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some repetition and lack of variety are present.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, agricultural water usage dominates in all six countries.

    Simplifies language for clarity.

  • RevisedAustralia uses 341 m^3 of water for domestic purposes.

    Avoids repetition of 'water usage'.

  • RevisedRussia and Turkey have low domestic water usage, ranging from 80 to 98 m^3.

    Eliminates unnecessary words for conciseness.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and analysis.

Suggestions

  • Include more detailed comparisons between countries.
  • Provide more analysis of the data.
  • Ensure all key features are highlighted.

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