Water use in six countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #4, band 7.5
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The table this answer describes
| Domestic | Agricultural | Industrial | |
|---|---|---|---|
| Australia | 341 | 741 | 276 |
| Canada | 279 | 1,238 | 832 |
| China | 26 | 806 | 71 |
| Russia | 98 | 1,863 | 56 |
| Turkey | 80 | 1,482 | 731 |
| UK | 38 | 810 | 398 |
Academic Task 1262 words
The table gives information about water use in three sectors in six different countries.
The table provides data about how much water was consumed in three sectors – households, agriculture and industry – across six different countries.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe measurements are in cubic meters.
Simplified the sentence for clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Russia led in agricultural water usage, whereas Canada had the highest industrial water consumption.
Simplified the sentence for clarity and cohesion.
Lexical resource
RevisedNotably, in countries like Turkey, Australia, China, and the UK, agriculture was the top water-consuming sector, with less water used for households and industry.
Improved word order and precision.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn detail, Russia's agricultural water consumption was 1863m³, the highest among the countries, followed by Turkey with 1482m³ and Canada with 1238m³.
Improved sentence structure for better coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe UK and China used less water, with figures of 810m³ and 806m³ respectively.
Simplified for clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAustralia used the least water in agriculture, with only 741m³.
Corrected grammatical structure for clarity.
In terms of industrial water use, Canada used the most water, amounting to 832m³. Turkey, the UK and Australia followed with fewer figures, showcasing 731m³, 398m³ and 276m³ respectively.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedChina and Russia had the lowest figures, with 71m³ and 56m³ respectively.
Rephrased for grammatical accuracy and clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedNotably, all countries used less water for households compared to other sectors.
Clarified the comparison for better understanding.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedCanada and Australia used the most water for households, with 279m³ and 341m³ respectively.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe other countries had lower figures: 98m³ in Russia, 80m³ in Turkey, 38m³ in the UK, and 26m³ in China.
Clarified and simplified the sentence.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas. However, there are some areas where cohesion could be improved for better flow.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Avoid repetition of similar ideas.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Russia led in agricultural water usage, whereas Canada had the highest industrial water consumption.
Simplified the sentence for clarity and cohesion.
RevisedIn detail, Russia's agricultural water consumption was 1863m³, the highest among the countries, followed by Turkey with 1482m³ and Canada with 1238m³.
Improved sentence structure for better coherence.
RevisedNotably, all countries used less water for households compared to other sectors.
Clarified the comparison for better understanding.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay shows a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors that do not impede understanding.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedChina and Russia had the lowest figures, with 71m³ and 56m³ respectively.
Rephrased for grammatical accuracy and clarity.
RevisedAustralia used the least water in agriculture, with only 741m³.
Corrected grammatical structure for clarity.
RevisedCanada and Australia used the most water for households, with 279m³ and 341m³ respectively.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, but some word choices could be more precise or varied.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedThe measurements are in cubic meters.
Simplified the sentence for clarity.
RevisedNotably, in countries like Turkey, Australia, China, and the UK, agriculture was the top water-consuming sector, with less water used for households and industry.
Improved word order and precision.
RevisedThe other countries had lower figures: 98m³ in Russia, 80m³ in Turkey, 38m³ in the UK, and 26m³ in China.
Clarified and simplified the sentence.
RevisedThe UK and China used less water, with figures of 810m³ and 806m³ respectively.
Simplified for clarity.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons. However, some minor inaccuracies in data interpretation are present.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data interpretations are accurate.
- Provide a clearer overview at the beginning.
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