How recycled paper is made: IELTS Task 1 answer #7, band 7.5
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178 words. Marked by Axiom on 20 January 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The process this answer describes
- Making pulp Used paper is dumped from crates/containers and combined with water and chemicals to create unfiltered pulp.
- Filtering The unfiltered pulp passes through a filter into a container below.
- Cleaning Air, along with water and soap, is added to the mixture in a tank; ink is separated/removed via an outlet pipe/chute, leaving cleaned pulp.
- Making paper The pulp is mixed with water & chemicals, then poured onto a conveyor belt where it passes through heated rollers to squeeze out water; the resulting sheet is rolled into rolls of recycled paper.
Academic Task 1178 words
The diagram below illustrates how recycled paper is made.
The picture shows the process of recycling paper.
Overall, the process comprises four main stages (making pulp, filtering, cleaning, and making paper). , which to complete.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIt starts with making pulp from used paper, followed by filtering and cleaning, and ends with completely recycled paper.
Revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis process is intricate...
Use synonyms to enhance lexical variety.
Lexical resource
Revised...requires considerable time and specialized equipment...
Use more precise vocabulary.
being conveyed on a belt into a large dish that has water and chemicals in it, and this helps to clean the paper. in a container with water, soap, and air to expel inks. During this stage, an air pump is installed, creating bubbles so that the ink rises to the surface, from where the ink is then removed through another pipe. This step is essential to ensure the pulp is free from any residual printing substances.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe process begins with used paper being conveyed...
Minor grammatical adjustment for smoother reading.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThen, it undergoes filtering to eliminate germs.
Use a more formal structure for better grammatical range.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedNext, the filtered pulp is placed...
Use 'Next' to improve transition between stages.
, during which clean pulp is passed through heated rollers for water loss.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFinally, the process moves to the stage where clean pulp is passed...
Using 'Finally' helps indicate the last stage more clearly.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedOnce this step is complete, the paper is ready for use.
Use 'Once' to indicate the completion of the process clearly.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear sequence of stages. However, some transitions between stages could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the transition between filtering and cleaning stages.
- Ensure each stage is clearly delineated.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe process begins with used paper being conveyed...
Minor grammatical adjustment for smoother reading.
RevisedNext, the filtered pulp is placed...
Use 'Next' to improve transition between stages.
RevisedFinally, the process moves to the stage where clean pulp is passed...
Using 'Finally' helps indicate the last stage more clearly.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt starts with making pulp from used paper, followed by filtering and cleaning, and ends with completely recycled paper.
Revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
RevisedOnce this step is complete, the paper is ready for use.
Use 'Once' to indicate the completion of the process clearly.
RevisedThen, it undergoes filtering to eliminate germs.
Use a more formal structure for better grammatical range.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary related to the process but could include more varied expressions.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis process is intricate...
Use synonyms to enhance lexical variety.
Revised...requires considerable time and specialized equipment...
Use more precise vocabulary.
Revised...to fully recycled paper.
Use 'fully' for a more precise description.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively describes the process, covering all main stages and details.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each stage is clearly explained with all necessary details.
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