How recycled paper is made: IELTS Task 1 answer #6, band 6.5
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135 words. Marked by Axiom on 16 January 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The process this answer describes
- Making pulp Used paper is dumped from crates/containers and combined with water and chemicals to create unfiltered pulp.
- Filtering The unfiltered pulp passes through a filter into a container below.
- Cleaning Air, along with water and soap, is added to the mixture in a tank; ink is separated/removed via an outlet pipe/chute, leaving cleaned pulp.
- Making paper The pulp is mixed with water & chemicals, then poured onto a conveyor belt where it passes through heated rollers to squeeze out water; the resulting sheet is rolled into rolls of recycled paper.
Academic Task 1135 words
The diagram illustrates how recycled paper is made
The diagram illustrates the process of making recycled paper.
Lexical resource
RevisedOverall, the process consists of four main stages: pulping, filtering, cleaning, and paper formation.
Using more precise terms enhances clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe process involves a series of mechanical and chemical treatments, transforming used paper into new paper.
Slight rephrasing improves clarity.
In the first stage, the used paper is transported to a conveyor belt into a pulping machine, where it is mixed with water and chemicals.
The mixture passes through a filtration system that removes larger particles, resulting in filtered pulp.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn the second stage, the pulp mixture is filtered.
Rephrasing for better flow and clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedSubsequently, the filtered pulp is subjected to a cleaning process.
Using 'subsequently' adds variety and sophistication.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe cleaned pulp is mixed with water and soap, and air is introduced to remove ink from the surface.
Clarifies the sequence and improves coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedBefore forming sheets of recycled paper, the cleaned pulp is passed through heated rollers.
Corrects a minor error and improves accuracy.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between stages could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more explicitly.
- Ensure each stage is clearly connected to the next.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe process involves a series of mechanical and chemical treatments, transforming used paper into new paper.
Slight rephrasing improves clarity.
RevisedIn the second stage, the pulp mixture is filtered.
Rephrasing for better flow and clarity.
RevisedThe cleaned pulp is mixed with water and soap, and air is introduced to remove ink from the surface.
Clarifies the sequence and improves coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but contains some errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe second stage involves filtering the pulp mixture.
Corrects the use of 'this' for clearer reference.
RevisedIt is then mixed with water and soap, and air is introduced to help remove ink from the surface.
Corrects grammatical errors for clarity.
RevisedBefore forming sheets of recycled paper, the cleaned pulp is passed through heated rollers.
Corrects singular/plural agreement.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The vocabulary used is appropriate for describing the process, but there is room for more variety and precision.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the process consists of four main stages: pulping, filtering, cleaning, and paper formation.
Using more precise terms enhances clarity.
RevisedSubsequently, the filtered pulp is subjected to a cleaning process.
Using 'subsequently' adds variety and sophistication.
RevisedBefore forming sheets of recycled paper, the cleaned pulp is passed through heated rollers.
Corrects a minor error and improves accuracy.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay effectively describes the process, covering all main stages and key details. Some minor details could be clarified.
Suggestions
- Clarify the role of each stage in the process.
- Include more detail about the chemical treatments involved.
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