How recycled paper is made: IELTS Task 1 answer #4, band 7.0
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166 words. Marked by Axiom on 13 January 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The process this answer describes
- Making pulp Used paper is dumped from crates/containers and combined with water and chemicals to create unfiltered pulp.
- Filtering The unfiltered pulp passes through a filter into a container below.
- Cleaning Air, along with water and soap, is added to the mixture in a tank; ink is separated/removed via an outlet pipe/chute, leaving cleaned pulp.
- Making paper The pulp is mixed with water & chemicals, then poured onto a conveyor belt where it passes through heated rollers to squeeze out water; the resulting sheet is rolled into rolls of recycled paper.
Academic Task 1166 words
The diagram below illustrates how recycled paper is made.
The diagram describes the steps involved in recyling paper.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedOverall, the process of recycling paper involves four main stages: making pulp, filtering, cleaning, and turning it into the final product.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and corrects the list format.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe initial step involves placing the used paper onto a conveyor belt, followed by treatment with water and chemicals to create pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOnce the paper is converted into pulp, it is then passed through a metal sieve to filter the pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
Once the filtered pulp has been put into a special container, it is then added air,water and soap. The following step is that the material is again treated with water and chemicals which results in cleaned pulp.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe final stages involve cleaning the pulp and transforming it into usable paper.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
Lexical resource
RevisedDuring the course of the same process, the ink is removed from the pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses more precise language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn the final step, the cleaned pulp is spread using heated rollers, with water treatment, on the conveyor belt where the paper is recycled and ready for reuse.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and corrects the prepositional phrase order.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and each step in the process is clearly described. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using different linking words to show the relationship between the steps in the process.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe initial step involves placing the used paper onto a conveyor belt, followed by treatment with water and chemicals to create pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
RevisedOnce the paper is converted into pulp, it is then passed through a metal sieve to filter the pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
RevisedThe final stages involve cleaning the pulp and transforming it into usable paper.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses a variety of cohesive devices.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe diagram describes the steps involved in recycling paper.
The revision corrects a typographical error.
RevisedOverall, the process of recycling paper involves four main stages: making pulp, filtering, cleaning, and turning it into the final product.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and corrects the list format.
RevisedIn the final step, the cleaned pulp is spread using heated rollers, with water treatment, on the conveyor belt where the paper is recycled and ready for reuse.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and corrects the prepositional phrase order.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe initial step involves subjecting the used paper to a conveyor belt, followed by treatment with water and chemicals to create pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses more precise language.
RevisedThe final stages involve cleaning the pulp and converting it into usable paper.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses more precise language.
RevisedDuring the course of the same process, the ink is removed from the pulp.
The revision provides a more natural flow of information and uses more precise language.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the process. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details in some parts of the process.
Suggestions
- Include specific details and examples to support your main points.
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