How recycled paper is made: IELTS Task 1 answer #3, band 7.5
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242 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 January 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The process this answer describes
- Making pulp Used paper is dumped from crates/containers and combined with water and chemicals to create unfiltered pulp.
- Filtering The unfiltered pulp passes through a filter into a container below.
- Cleaning Air, along with water and soap, is added to the mixture in a tank; ink is separated/removed via an outlet pipe/chute, leaving cleaned pulp.
- Making paper The pulp is mixed with water & chemicals, then poured onto a conveyor belt where it passes through heated rollers to squeeze out water; the resulting sheet is rolled into rolls of recycled paper.
Academic Task 1242 words
The diagram illustrates how recycled paper is made.
The diagram shows the process by which recycled paper is produced. Overall, the process entails four main stages, starting with making pulp from used paper, followed by filtering it, removing any impurities from the pulp and lastly producing paper. Additionally, the process is quite complex and completely machine-driven, which utilizes different special pieces of equipment.
onto a conveyer belt, which delivers the used paper to a special tank, where it is mixed with the water full of chemicals. , which is undertaken with the help of the filtration equipment. During this stage, the filtered pulp is poured into a container and mixed with soapy water; meanwhile air is also pumped into a container. attached to the container.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe process begins with loading boxes filled with used paper...
Improves the transition by using a more general introductory phrase.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe chemical facilitates the transformation of paper into pulp.
Improves lexical resource by using more precise language.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAfter the pulp is ready, it progresses to the filtering phase...
Enhances cohesion by using a clearer transition word.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedInk from the pulp is removed through a small tube...
Improves conciseness by removing 'any' which is unnecessary.
to another tank to be purified by water and chemicals once more. where it is flattened using heated rollers, which also serve as a squeezer, ensuring that no water is left in the pulp. at the end of the conveyer belt. Finally, the recycled paper rolls are ready for shipment and distribution.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedSubsequently, the resulting pulp is sent...
Strengthens the connection between sentences with a transitional adverb.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe purified pulp is subsequently poured onto another conveyor belt...
Enhances vocabulary by using synonyms and improving specificity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedOnce flattened and dried, the paper is rolled...
Simplifies the structure for clarity.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay follows a logical structure and clearly describes the stages of the recycling process. However, some transitions between stages could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to enhance the flow between stages.
- Ensure each stage is clearly distinguished and connected to the next.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe process begins with loading boxes filled with used paper...
Improves the transition by using a more general introductory phrase.
RevisedAfter the pulp is ready, it progresses to the filtering phase...
Enhances cohesion by using a clearer transition word.
RevisedSubsequently, the resulting pulp is sent...
Strengthens the connection between sentences with a transitional adverb.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe chemical ensures that the paper turns into pulp.
Corrects the grammatical structure by adding 'that' and correct verb form.
RevisedOnce flattened and dried, the paper is rolled...
Simplifies the structure for clarity.
RevisedInk from the pulp is removed through a small tube...
Improves conciseness by removing 'any' which is unnecessary.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary specific to the process, but there is room for more varied language.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe process involves four primary stages...
Uses a more common synonym to vary vocabulary.
RevisedThe chemical facilitates the transformation of paper into pulp.
Improves lexical resource by using more precise language.
RevisedThe purified pulp is subsequently poured onto another conveyor belt...
Enhances vocabulary by using synonyms and improving specificity.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively covers all stages of the recycling process and provides a clear overview.
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