Office building, now and in future: IELTS Task 1 answer #4, band 5.5
A student’s answer to this repeated IELTS question, shared without their name and marked by Axiom on the four criteria. Select a highlighted passage to see how it could be revised, and why.
191 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The plan this answer describes
Present Office Building
- Four offices lie along the lower side.
- Kitchen, canteen and storeroom occupy the upper side, with WCs near the right and grass strips on both sides.
Future Office Building
- There are still four office rooms: two upper offices and two larger lower offices.
- Kitchen and Canteen labels disappear; the storeroom remains.
- The grass areas become outdoor seating on the left and meeting space on the right; WCs move and a coffee machine is shown.
Academic Task 1191 words
The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Moreover, two offices would replace the kitchen and canteen.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes in an office building from the present to the future.
Corrected the subject-verb agreement and used more precise vocabulary.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the main changes include the expansion of the stock room, relocation of the entrance, reception, and toilets, as well as the transformation of grass areas into meeting areas, outdoor seating, and spaces for coffee machines.
The sentence was revised for clarity and to improve the flow of information.
At present, in the top of the map is located kitchen, canteen and stock room, with toilets linked to stock room and eastern grass, while the western grass is linked to kitchen and four neighboring offices in the bottom of the map. By the end of the offices is located entrance with reception.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn the future, two grass areas will be refurbished into seating and meeting places, with coffee machines introduced near the expanded stock room.
The sentence was simplified to improve readability and coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedFacilities located at the top of the map, such as the kitchen and canteen, are planned to be demolished and replaced with two offices from the bottom.
Improved clarity and precision in vocabulary.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe remaining offices, toilets, and entrance with reception are planned to be relocated from their initial positions.
Corrected repetition and improved sentence structure.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and linking words.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the main changes include the expansion of the stock room, relocation of the entrance, reception, and toilets, as well as the transformation of grass areas into meeting areas, outdoor seating, and spaces for coffee machines.
The sentence was revised for clarity and to improve the flow of information.
RevisedCurrently, the top of the map features the kitchen, canteen, and stock room, with toilets adjacent to the stock room and eastern grass area. The western grass area is connected to the kitchen and four offices at the bottom of the map.
The sentence was restructured for better coherence and clarity.
RevisedIn the future, two grass areas will be refurbished into seating and meeting places, with coffee machines introduced near the expanded stock room.
The sentence was simplified to improve readability and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes in an office building from the present to the future.
Corrected subject-verb agreement and preposition use.
RevisedThe remaining offices, toilets, and entrance with reception are planned to be relocated from their initial positions.
Corrected repetition and improved sentence structure.
RevisedFacilities located at the top of the map, such as the kitchen and canteen, are planned to be demolished and replaced with two offices from the bottom.
Improved sentence structure and corrected grammatical errors.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary but lacks precision in some areas.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes in an office building from the present to the future.
Corrected the subject-verb agreement and used more precise vocabulary.
RevisedOverall, the main changes include the expansion of the stock room, relocation of the entrance, reception, and toilets, and the transformation of grass areas into meeting areas, outdoor seating, and spaces for coffee machines.
Improved vocabulary precision and sentence structure.
RevisedFacilities located at the top of the map, such as the kitchen and canteen, are planned to be demolished and replaced with two offices from the bottom.
Improved clarity and precision in vocabulary.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and clear conclusions.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the present and future layouts.
- Provide a clear conclusion summarizing the main changes.
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