Office building, now and in future: IELTS Task 1 answer #5, band 6.5
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173 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The plan this answer describes
Present Office Building
- Four offices lie along the lower side.
- Kitchen, canteen and storeroom occupy the upper side, with WCs near the right and grass strips on both sides.
Future Office Building
- There are still four office rooms: two upper offices and two larger lower offices.
- Kitchen and Canteen labels disappear; the storeroom remains.
- The grass areas become outdoor seating on the left and meeting space on the right; WCs move and a coffee machine is shown.
Academic Task 1173 words
The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Additionally, the remaining areas - WCs, raw of offices and entrance with reception - will stay largely untouched with only minor changes.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes in the office building from the present to the future.
Improved precision and clarity of vocabulary.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn general, the removal of the kitchen, canteen, and vegetation will create space for an external seating area, additional offices, and a coffee machine in the future.
Clarified the sequence and purpose of changes.
At present, the area is boosting a leafy environment with WCs on the top boundary.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAt the bottom of the office building, there is a series of office chambers next to the entrance with a reception, and the canteen is located between the kitchen and stock room on the opposite side.
Improved clarity and structure of the sentence.
In the future, office department will undergo significant makeovers.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe removal of the kitchen and canteen will make room for offices and a coffee machine, and WCs will be built at the expense of removing greenery.
Corrected verb form and article usage.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe new entrance with a reception area will lead to the removal of a chain of office rooms, and another green area will be transformed into an outdoor seating area.
Clarified the sequence and impact of changes.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe stock room will be expanded.
Used a more appropriate verb form.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents the information in a logical order, but there are some issues with the clarity of connections between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Clarify the sequence of changes.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn general, the removal of the kitchen, canteen, and vegetation will create space for an external seating area, additional offices, and a coffee machine in the future.
Clarified the sequence and purpose of changes.
RevisedAt the bottom of the office building, there is a series of office chambers next to the entrance with a reception, and the canteen is located between the kitchen and stock room on the opposite side.
Improved clarity and structure of the sentence.
RevisedThe new entrance with a reception area will lead to the removal of a chain of office rooms, and another green area will be transformed into an outdoor seating area.
Clarified the sequence and impact of changes.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are several errors that affect clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn general, eliminating the kitchen, canteen, and vegetation will create space for an external seating area, additional offices, and a coffee machine in the future.
Corrected article usage and parallel structure.
RevisedThe removal of the kitchen and canteen will make room for offices and a coffee machine, and WCs will be built at the expense of removing greenery.
Corrected verb form and article usage.
RevisedThe stock room will be expanded.
Used a more appropriate verb form.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, but some word choices could be improved for precision.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes in the office building from the present to the future.
Improved precision and clarity of vocabulary.
RevisedThe area currently features a leafy environment with WCs at the top boundary.
Improved word choice for clarity.
RevisedThe office building will undergo significant renovations.
Used more appropriate vocabulary for the context.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear overview of the changes, but some details are missing or unclear.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all relevant features are mentioned.
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