Doctors’ pay in seven countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #7, band 7.5
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The bar chart this answer describes
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| Doctors | Other workers | |
|---|---|---|
| The US | 120 | 45 |
| Switzerland | 70 | 40 |
| Finland | 50 | 25 |
| Germany | 63 | 20 |
| Czech | 65 | 20 |
| Italy | 60 | 20 |
| France | 70 | 30 |
Academic Task 1158 words
The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers in seven different countries in 2004
Lexical resource
RevisedThe chart illustrates the average annual salaries of doctors and other workers across seven countries in 2004.
Improved vocabulary by using 'illustrates' instead of 'provides information about'.
Lexical resource
RevisedOverall, doctors consistently earned more than other workers in all countries, with the highest salaries observed in the US and the lowest in the Czech Republic.
Enhanced vocabulary with 'consistently' and 'observed' for variety.
This was followed by France, doctors earned $80,000, whereas other employees took salary at around $25,000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAmerican doctors had the highest annual income, at approximately $120,000, which was three times higher than that of American workers, who earned $43,000. In contrast, France followed with doctors earning $80,000, whereas other employees took a salary of around $25,000.
Added a linking phrase to connect the comparison between the US and France.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFurthermore, Italy and Germany exhibited similar patterns; doctors earned approximately $60,000 and $61,000 respectively, while other workers received just $20,000 in both countries.
Improved sentence structure for clarity and flow.
However, Switzerland had the highest salary for other workers at about $40,000 in contrast all seven counties.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedSwitzerland and Finland showed high average salaries for doctors, at $65,000 and $55,000 respectively, although Switzerland had the highest salary for other workers at about $40,000.
Added a comparative element to enhance cohesion.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe Czech Republic recorded the lowest salaries for both doctors and other employees, at approximately $40,000 and $15,000 respectively.
Used 'recorded' to vary the expression.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically structured with a clear overview and comparison of data. However, the flow could be improved with better use of linking words.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAmerican doctors had the highest annual income, at approximately $120,000, which was three times higher than that of American workers, who earned $43,000. In contrast, France followed with doctors earning $80,000, whereas other employees took a salary of around $25,000.
Added a linking phrase to connect the comparison between the US and France.
RevisedFurthermore, Italy and Germany exhibited similar patterns; doctors earned approximately $60,000 and $61,000 respectively, while other workers received just $20,000 in both countries.
Improved sentence structure for clarity and flow.
RevisedSwitzerland and Finland showed high average salaries for doctors, at $65,000 and $55,000 respectively, although Switzerland had the highest salary for other workers at about $40,000.
Added a comparative element to enhance cohesion.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates good grammatical range and accuracy, with minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAmerican doctors had the highest annual income, approximately $120,000, which was three times higher than that of American workers, who earned $43,000.
Removed unnecessary comma for better grammatical accuracy.
RevisedFurthermore, Italy and Germany had similar patterns; doctors earned approximately $60,000 and $61,000 respectively, while other workers received just $20,000 in both countries.
Corrected 'pattern' to 'patterns' to match plural subject.
RevisedSwitzerland and Finland showed high average salaries for doctors, at $65,000 and $55,000 respectively.
Corrected 'salary' to 'salaries' to match plural subject.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, but there are some repetitive phrases.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe chart illustrates the average annual salaries of doctors and other workers across seven countries in 2004.
Improved vocabulary by using 'illustrates' instead of 'provides information about'.
RevisedOverall, doctors consistently earned more than other workers in all countries, with the highest salaries observed in the US and the lowest in the Czech Republic.
Enhanced vocabulary with 'consistently' and 'observed' for variety.
RevisedThe Czech Republic recorded the lowest salaries for both doctors and other employees, at approximately $40,000 and $15,000 respectively.
Used 'recorded' to vary the expression.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively summarizes and compares the data from the chart, fulfilling the task requirements.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for completeness.
- Ensure all countries are mentioned for a comprehensive overview.
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