International cooperation: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 7.0
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212 words. Marked by Axiom on 18 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2212 words
Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there are many serious challenges in the world that affect many countries.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn my opinion, I strongly agree that most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation and that nations must work together to resolve these issues.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and ensures that the point is clearly and effectively communicated.
First of all, climate change is a global issue that no single country can tackle alone. Environmental problems like pollution and global warming do not have borders, so one country's efforts are not enough. Thus, governments need to make global agreements and coordinate their strategies to mitigate damage to the environment and protect our planet for the future.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFor instance, a nation's efforts to reduce carbon emissions may be in vain if others continue to pollute. This exemplifies the need for a collaborative approach in addressing environmental issues.
This revision provides a more direct and clear connection between the example and the point being made.
Secondly, international collaboration is essential to combat global health crises like pandemics.
Lexical resource
RevisedWhen a virulent disease spreads globally, countries must rapidly share information, medical research, and resources.
The word 'virulent' is a more precise term for a 'dangerous' disease and provides a more specific description of the type of disease that is being referred to.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedDuring a pandemic, it is crucial for richer countries to provide financial aid and medicine to support poorer nations in preventing the further spread of the virus.
This revision provides a more direct and clear connection between the example and the point being made.
Lexical resource
RevisedResolving such significant health issues effectively would be impossible without mutual support and diplomatic efforts.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
In conclusion, I completely agree that global cooperation is necessary to solve major world issues. By working together on climate change and pandemics, countries can protect people and create a better future
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your examples are directly relevant to the point you are making.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedFor instance, a nation's efforts to reduce carbon emissions may be in vain if others continue to pollute. This exemplifies the need for a collaborative approach in addressing environmental issues.
This revision provides a more direct and clear connection between the example and the point being made.
RevisedDuring a pandemic, it is crucial for richer countries to provide financial aid and medicine to support poorer nations in preventing the further spread of the virus.
This revision provides a more direct and clear connection between the example and the point being made.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn my opinion, I strongly agree that most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation and that nations must work together to resolve these issues.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and ensures that the point is clearly and effectively communicated.
RevisedWhen a dangerous disease spreads around the world, it is imperative for countries to quickly share information, medical research, and resources.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedWhen a virulent disease spreads globally, countries must rapidly share information, medical research, and resources.
The word 'virulent' is a more precise term for a 'dangerous' disease and provides a more specific description of the type of disease that is being referred to.
RevisedResolving such significant health issues effectively would be impossible without mutual support and diplomatic efforts.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The essay provides relevant, detailed examples to support the argument. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed explanation of how international cooperation can be achieved in other areas beyond environmental and health issues.
Suggestions
- Consider providing a more detailed explanation of how international cooperation can be achieved in other areas beyond environmental and health issues.
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