International cooperation: IELTS Task 2 essay #4, band 6.0
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231 words. Marked by Axiom on 9 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2231 words
Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree？
In recent years, it is often argued that international cooperation is the only way to solve the most urgent problems in the world. However, I disagree with this view, for each country can solve many problems by themselves and local governments can help too.
Governments can introduce new laws and provide better public services to improve people's life. For example, a country can reduce unemployment by supporting local businesses and creating more job opportuinities.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFirstly, numerous issues can be addressed independently by individual nations, without the need for foreign assistance.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedEach country has its own government, responsible for addressing issues such as unemployment, poor education, and healthcare.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and concise phrasing.
Lexical resource
RevisedAs a result, individuals can have better living conditions.
The revised sentence corrects the singular to plural error and improves the overall clarity of the sentence.
Secondly, local actions can also be effective in solving environmental and social problems.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIndividuals and communities can collaborate to implement changes within their respective nations.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and formal phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor instance, local governments can organize cleaning activities, plant more trees, and encourage the use of public transport to reduce air pollution.
The revised sentence corrects the typographical error 'ad' to 'and'.
Lexical resource
RevisedThese actions may seem small, yet they can have a positively significant effect on the environment.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHence, not every significant issue necessitates international cooperation.
The revised sentence is more concise and uses a more formal tone.
Although countries sometimes need to work together, many issues can be deal with effectively by the governments and people themselves in each country.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedTo conclude, I dissent from the view that the majority of pressing issues can only be resolved through international collaboration.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the points you have made in the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFirstly, numerous issues can be addressed independently by individual nations, without the need for foreign assistance.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone.
RevisedHence, not every significant issue necessitates international cooperation.
The revised sentence is more concise and uses a more formal tone.
RevisedTo conclude, I dissent from the view that the majority of pressing issues can only be resolved through international collaboration.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there is room for improvement in terms of grammatical range and accuracy.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedEach country has its own government, responsible for addressing issues such as unemployment, poor education, and healthcare.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and concise phrasing.
RevisedIndividuals and communities can collaborate to implement changes within their respective nations.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and formal phrasing.
RevisedFor instance, local governments can organize cleaning activities, plant more trees, and encourage the use of public transport to reduce air pollution.
The revised sentence corrects the typographical error 'ad' to 'and'.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAs a result, individuals can have better living conditions.
The revised sentence corrects the singular to plural error and improves the overall clarity of the sentence.
RevisedFor instance, a country can reduce unemployment by supporting local businesses and creating more job opportunities.
The revised sentence corrects the typographical error in 'oputuunities'.
RevisedThese actions may seem small, yet they can have a positively significant effect on the environment.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be further developed and supported with more specific examples.
Suggestions
- Try to develop your arguments more fully and support them with specific examples.
- Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the points you have made in the essay.
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