Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #33, band 4.5
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314 words. Marked by Axiom on 26 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1314 words
The graph below shows the average house prices in three countriws between the years 1997 and 2014
The line graph illustrates the average house prices in three nations from 1997 to 2014. Overall, the amount of house cost in Country A, Country B and Country C followed increased albeit to varying degrees. Additionally, Country A stood out from other nations with higher figures throughout the period.
Country A showed bigger figures compared to others. The amount of house price remained stable at around 200 thousands of dollars from 1997 to 2000 in Country A, before seeing a significant rise to approximately 550 thousands of dollars for between 2000 and 2004. Despite increasing considerably, the house cost dropped slightly to 500 over the next 3 years (2005,2006,2007). But then it recovered to around 730 thousands of dollars from 2007 to 2012. Before reaching peak to 750 in 2014, the house prices experienced a slight decrease to 720 thousands of dollars in 2013.
In contrast, Country B and C had a relatively small numbers. The average house prices in country B started at around 200 thousands of dollars and this was followed by a consistent rise from 1997 to 2004, reaching 300 thousands of dollars. It saw a slight drop to 250 thousands of dollars between 2004 and 2008, before increasing dramatically to 500 thousands of dollars for the next year. Then it remained stable for the last years ( from 2009 to 2014). The house cost in Country C began at around 150 thousands of dollars and this was followed by a stable growth to 250 thousands of dollars for next decade. After seeing a dramatic decrease to approximately 130 thousands of dollars in 2008, it recovered to 250 thousands of dollars in 2009. After that house prices almost remained stable at 250 thousands of dollars from 2009 to 2011 but then the figure increased slightly to 270 thousand of dollars in 2013 and dropped to 250 thousands of dollars in 2014.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 4.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The writer uses a range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases effectively. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using more varied transitional phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all information in the paragraph is relevant to that topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the average house prices in Country A, Country B, and Country C from 1997 to 2014.
Providing the specific names of the countries can improve the clarity and specificity of the information presented.
RevisedIn contrast, the average house prices in Country B and C were relatively low.
The original sentence is a bit unclear. The revised sentence provides a more precise and understandable comparison.
RevisedAfter that, house prices in Country C remained almost stable at around 250,000 dollars from 2009 to 2011.
Including the specific country can improve the clarity and relevance of the information presented.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved for better clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedCountry A had higher figures compared to the others.
The revised sentence is more grammatically accurate and natural.
RevisedDespite a considerable increase, the house cost in Country A dropped slightly to around 500,000 dollars over the next 3 years (2005, 2006, 2007).
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
RevisedIt then remained stable for the rest of the period (from 2009 to 2014).
The revised sentence is more concise and avoids the awkward phrasing 'the last years'.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The writer uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe house cost in Country A followed an increasing trend, albeit to varying degrees.
The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and awkward. The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
RevisedBefore experiencing a dramatic decrease to approximately 130,000 dollars in 2008
The phrase 'seeing a dramatic decrease' is not the most appropriate or formal phrasing for this context. The revised sentence uses a more suitable verb.
RevisedThe house cost in Country A dropped slightly to around 500,000 dollars over the next 3 years (2005, 2006, 2007).
The specific range in the original sentence is a bit unclear. The revised sentence provides more detail and clarity.
Task achievement
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the information presented in the graph. The writer makes appropriate comparisons and trends are identified and explained well. However, the writer could improve by providing a more detailed analysis of the data in some parts.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including reasons for the trends observed if possible.
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