Is scientific research a waste?: IELTS Task 2 essay #11, band 8.0

There is an ongoing debate over whether many people argue that a bunch of scientific research conducted nowadays is merely a waste of time and money. Although some people consider that these researches appear unnecessary or impractical, I largely disagree with this viewpoint for several reasons.

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   RevisedAlthough some people consider that this research is unnecessary or impractical, I largely disagree with this viewpoint for several reasons.

   The word 'research' is uncountable in English, so the correct form is 'this research' not 'these researches'.

One key reason why I disagree with this notion is that scientific research has consistently improved human life in remarkable ways. Scientists use modern technologies regularly in order to find a cure for serious diseases. For example, research in medicine has led to life-saving vaccines, cancer treatments, and advanced surgical procedures. Likewise, scientific projects in communication and transportation have transformed the modern world, making life more convenient and efficient. Without constant research, society would struggle to solve emerging global challenges such as climate change, food shortages, and infectious diseases.

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   RevisedI disagree with this notion for the key reason that scientific research has consistently brought remarkable improvements to human life.

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   RevisedWithout continuous research, society would struggle to address emerging global challenges such as climate change, food shortages, and infectious diseases.

   The phrase 'continuous research' is more appropriate in this context.

Another significant benefit of continuous scientific research is that scientific developments often bring unexpected long-term benefits. Researchers often use trial and error, even if it initially seems irrelevant, and it may later become extremely valuable. When governments allocate their budgets correctly for scientific experiments, it can bring more opportunities for scientists to conduct other significant research. A good case in point is the Internet, GPS, and even smartphones, all of which are indirect results of scientific and military research conducted decades ago. These discoveries have significantly adjusted people’s lives. They have helped to improve education, business, and communication worldwide. Therefore, even if some projects do not produce immediate outcomes, their future contributions can be extremely valuable for society.

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   RevisedAdditionally, a significant benefit of continuous scientific research is the often-unforeseen long-term benefits of scientific developments.

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   RevisedWhen governments appropriately allocate their budgets to scientific research, it can create more opportunities for scientists to undertake other significant studies.

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   RevisedThese discoveries have significantly enhanced people’s lives.

   The word 'enhanced' is a more appropriate choice in this context.

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   RevisedThey have helped improve education, business, and communication on a global scale.

   The revised sentence is more concise and uses more formal language.

To conclude, although scientific studies cannot bring direct and instant benefits, I firmly believe that scientific research is a worthwhile investment because some modern technologies, medical advancements, and long-term economic developments are unexpected results of scientific experiments.