Is scientific research a waste?: IELTS Task 2 essay #6, band 8.0
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Some people say that a lot of scientific research done today is a waste of time and money. To what extent do you agree disagree?
Nowadays, some people believe that scientific research is not very useful and that it wastes time and money. However, I do not agree with this opinion. In my view, scientific research is extremely helpful for health, for protecting the environment, and for making life easier and more comfortable in many areas.
In the past, many diseases were very dangerous and caused millions of deaths. Scientists worked quickly to develop vaccines, which saved millions of lives around the world. Without scientific research, it would not be possible to fight such global health problems. Even common illnesses like the flu are easier to manage today because of better medicine and medical tools. Research has also improved hospital equipment, surgeries, and patient care, making the healthcare system more effective.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedPrimarily, scientific research has significantly contributed to increasing life expectancy and improving health.
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Lexical resource
RevisedCurrently, we are able to manage a wide range of diseases due to the advancements in research.
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Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor instance, the significant advancements in cancer treatment over the past twenty years have led to a higher survival rate.
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Lexical resource
RevisedA pertinent example is the COVID-19 pandemic.
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Climate change, air pollution, and dirty water are very serious problems. Scientists study these issues and suggest good solutions. For example, they invented solar energy, electric cars, and wind turbines. Science also teaches us how to recycle, use less energy, and reduce waste. All these actions make the world safer and cleaner for future generations.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, research has played a crucial role in safeguarding the environment and preserving nature.
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Lexical resource
RevisedThese innovations contribute to the reduction of fossil fuel consumption, which is detrimental to the planet.
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Grammar & accuracy
RevisedLacking this knowledge, we would persist in damaging the Earth without comprehending the long-term consequences.
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Every day, people use mobile phones, computers, and the internet. All these things are the result of many years of scientific work. Today, people can work from home, study online, and buy things on the internet. These changes save time, reduce costs, and create more convenience in everyday life.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFinally, continuous research and development have been instrumental in advancing technology.
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Grammar & accuracy
RevisedResearch is set to continue shaping our future, making technology increasingly beneficial.
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In conclusion, I believe that scientific research is not a waste of time or money. It helps save lives, protects the environment, and makes our lives better. Even if it takes time, it brings important results for the future of all people.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are clearly structured. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that your conclusion fully summarizes the key points of your argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPrimarily, scientific research has significantly contributed to increasing life expectancy and improving health.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
RevisedAdditionally, research has played a crucial role in safeguarding the environment and preserving nature.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
RevisedFinally, continuous research and development have been instrumental in advancing technology.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay shows a good control of a range of grammatical structures, with only minor errors. However, there are a few sentences that could be improved for better clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFor instance, the significant advancements in cancer treatment over the past twenty years have led to a higher survival rate.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the idea.
RevisedLacking this knowledge, we would persist in damaging the Earth without comprehending the long-term consequences.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
RevisedResearch is set to continue shaping our future, making technology increasingly beneficial.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Lexical resource
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of informal language that could be improved.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedCurrently, we are able to manage a wide range of diseases due to the advancements in research.
The revised sentence removes the informal 'but' at the beginning of the sentence and replaces it with a more formal alternative.
RevisedA pertinent example is the COVID-19 pandemic.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
RevisedThese innovations contribute to the reduction of fossil fuel consumption, which is detrimental to the planet.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Task response
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the conclusion could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Try to fully summarize the key points of your argument in the conclusion.
- Ensure that your conclusion is directly related to the prompt and clearly supports your position.
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