The influence of news media: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 6.0
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256 words. Marked by Axiom on 13 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2256 words
Today news plays an important role in people's lives and news media are more influential than ever before. Why is it this case? Is it positive or negative?
It is suggested that nowadays news has a crucial role in people's lives and media news are more influential than ever before. I believe this reason is because of social media growth. Additionally, In my opinion this case has positive aspects.
For instance, Instagram is now the most used and popular social media application, because it has all the facilities including: chatting, scrolling videos and posts about global world. Moreover, news spreads instantly through this app.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, in today's modern life, I believe social media plays a huge role.
The addition of 'today's' modern life provides a smoother transition and more specific time reference.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis is because individuals can keep in touch with their friends and receive global or local information.
The revision corrects the awkward use of 'since' and 'as' and provides a more accurate expression of the idea.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedSocial media is more influential now than in the past because people have greater access to global news through these platforms.
The revision provides a more concise and clear explanation of the idea.
On the other hand, in my view this has positive sides for human beings. News spreads information about diseases and prevention of it.
Lexical resource
RevisedStudents can utilize news media for educational purposes, such as online learning.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective use of collocation.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedSome people who cannot afford school fees may benefit from teachers sharing pre-recorded videos on social media for free.
The revision corrects the awkward and unclear expression of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedFurthermore, social media not only disseminates educational content, but also raises awareness about health issues.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective use of collocation.
In conclusion, I believe today's news media is really influential than ever before. Since, individuals can keep in touch with their close people and also being aware of global news.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedMoreover, I think it is a positive case as it promotes both educational values and health awareness.
The revision corrects the awkward and unclear expression of the idea.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of ideas and the use of linking words.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the one hand, in today's modern life, I believe social media plays a huge role.
The addition of 'today's' modern life provides a smoother transition and more specific time reference.
RevisedSocial media is more influential now than in the past because people have greater access to global news through these platforms.
The revision provides a more concise and clear explanation of the idea.
RevisedMoreover, social media is not only used for educational purposes, but also for health awareness.
The revision provides a clearer and more precise expression of the idea.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the essay that can cause some difficulty for the reader.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis is because individuals can keep in touch with their friends and receive global or local information.
The revision corrects the awkward use of 'since' and 'as' and provides a more accurate expression of the idea.
RevisedSome people who cannot afford school fees may benefit from teachers sharing pre-recorded videos on social media for free.
The revision corrects the awkward and unclear expression of the idea.
RevisedMoreover, I think it is a positive case as it promotes both educational values and health awareness.
The revision corrects the awkward and unclear expression of the idea.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe reason social social media is more influential now than before is that people have greater access to global news through these platforms.
The revision provides a more natural and accurate use of collocation.
RevisedStudents can utilize news media for educational purposes, such as online learning.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective use of collocation.
RevisedFurthermore, social media not only disseminates educational content, but also raises awareness about health issues.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective use of collocation.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples to support the arguments.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Make sure that you fully develop your ideas and provide a clear explanation of how your examples are relevant to your argument.
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