The influence of news media: IELTS Task 2 essay #1, band 7.0
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302 words. Marked by Axiom on 13 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2302 words
Today news plays an important role in people's lives and news media are more influential than ever before. Why is it this case? Is it positive or negative?
There is a view that news has become an important part of people's daily lives and has more influence than in the past. This is mainly because modern technology allows people to receive information at any time.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAlthough news can have negative effects, I believe its benefits outweigh the costs.
The revised sentence is more concise and has a stronger impact.
Even when they are not looking for news, they may come across important information while using social media. As a result, news has become a normal part of everyday conversations.
Lexical resource
RevisedOne key reason for the increased influence of news is people's habitual use of smartphones.
The revised sentence is more concise and natural in tone.
Lexical resource
RevisedFor instance, people may come across news at stations about changes in transport or new government regulations.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and uses a more formal term for 'rules'.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAdditionally, people often share interesting news with friends and family, which helps disseminate information more rapidly.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise.
Some people share information without checking whether it is true, which can cause confusion among readers.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, the increasing influence of news can lead to certain issues.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the point being made.
Lexical resource
RevisedAdditionally, being exposed to an excess of negative news can cause unnecessary worry.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise.
One important advantage is that it helps people make better decisions in their daily lives. For example, parents may learn about changes in school schedules or road conditions before leaving home. Another benefit is that news allows people to understand problems in other parts of the world.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedDespite these problems, I believe that the benefits of news outweigh the drawbacks.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis can encourage them to be more considerate and responsible members of society.
The revised sentence uses a more precise and effective word.
In conclusion, news has become more influential because people can easily access and share information through modern technology.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedWhile misinformation and negative stories can pose challenges, I believe the benefits of news, which keep people informed and aid in decision-making, outweigh the drawbacks.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Ensure that your examples are fully developed and clearly support your arguments.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough news can have negative effects, I believe its benefits outweigh the costs.
The revised sentence is more concise and has a stronger impact.
RevisedOn the one hand, the increasing influence of news can lead to certain issues.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the point being made.
RevisedDespite these problems, I believe that the benefits of news outweigh the drawbacks.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay shows a good control of a range of grammatical structures, with only minor errors. However, there are a few sentences that could be rephrased for clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAdditionally, people often share interesting news with friends and family, which helps disseminate information more rapidly.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise.
RevisedThis can encourage them to be more considerate and responsible members of society.
The revised sentence uses a more precise and effective word.
RevisedWhile misinformation and negative stories can pose challenges, I believe the benefits of news, which keep people informed and aid in decision-making, outweigh the drawbacks.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne key reason for the increased influence of news is people's habitual use of smartphones.
The revised sentence is more concise and natural in tone.
RevisedFor instance, people may come across news at stations about changes in transport or new government regulations.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and uses a more formal term for 'rules'.
RevisedAdditionally, being exposed to an excess of negative news can cause unnecessary worry.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise.
Task response
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the conclusion could be more fully developed.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more comprehensive conclusion that summarizes the main points and clearly restates your position.
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