Growth and a clean environment: IELTS Task 2 essay #3, band 5.5

Many people argue that it is impossible for a country to be both economically successful and have clean environment, while others argue that these two objectives are not compatible. In my point of view to being economically successful and having a clean environment is not so difficult for government. In my opinion, it is possible to government and to doing so it should some limits to using from fuels and people also should drive cars which is not harmful to the environment. On the other hand it it is sometimes impossible to regulate all the drivers and other consumers in the city. However this can be addressed by encouraging residents to be economically friendly.

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   RevisedIn my opinion, it is possible for a government to achieve this, as long as there are some limits on the use of fuels and non-environmentally friendly transportation.

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   RevisedHowever, this can be addressed by encouraging residents to adopt more environmentally friendly practices.

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On the one hand, government can be successful in both economy and having clean atmosphere. Initially they should set some rules and limits to using some products and transportation means which can negatively affect to the environment, because they play a significant role in the industry of country and environment, and they have adverse affect on people's mental and physical well-being. However, these can be addressed by setting some rules and regulations on the things such as, cars, factorys and other kinds of places which can cause for air pollution.

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   RevisedOn the one hand, the government can be successful in both areas of the economy and environmental cleanliness.

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   RevisedHowever, these issues can be addressed by setting rules and regulations for things such as cars, factories, and other potential sources of air pollution.

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On the other hand, sometimes it can be impossible to regulate all of the means of issues that are interrupting the economy and the environment of the country. For exaple, human activities can contribute to the economy and they also plays a significant role in the environment of country. Although, government should encourage them to be environmental friendly by providing money and other things which can encourage them to be beneficial to the government. For instance, by planting trees they may not only help to the environment and economy of country but also help to peoiple who aresuffering from environment.

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   RevisedOn the other hand, it may sometimes be impossible to regulate all factors that could potentially disrupt the country's economy and environment.

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   RevisedFor example, human activities can contribute to the economy and also play a significant role in the environment of a country.

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   RevisedFor instance, planting trees can not only benefit the country's environment and economy, but also help people who are suffering from environmental issues.

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In conclusion, it is not impossible to be economically successful and having clean environment, however, certain factors play vital role to the both economy and environment. However they can tackle by setting limits and encouraging people to be a economically friendly.