Timber, pulp and paper production: IELTS Task 1 answer #8, band 7.0
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The line graph this answer describes
Show the data
| Timber | Pulp | Paper | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1980 | 5 | 4 | 5.5 |
| 1985 | 10 | 6 | 7 |
| 1990 | 8 | 7 | 8 |
| 1995 | 6.5 | 8 | 9 |
| 2000 | 7.5 | 10 | 12 |
Academic Task 1187 words
The graph shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp, and paper from 1980 to 2000
The line chart illustrates the production trends of timber, pulp, and paper in a European country from 1980 to 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the production of paper experienced a significant rise over the two decades, ultimately surpassing the other two products.
Added 'the' for specificity and clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedTimber showed smaller fluctuations and ended just below paper in production volume.
Replaced 'oscillations' with 'fluctuations' for clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn contrast, pulp production consistently declined over the period.
Added 'consistently' for clarity and emphasis.
In the initial year, timber was the leading product with a production level of about six million tonnes.By 1985,timber production increased, peaking at approximately 12 million tonnes, before experiencing decline and stopping at around 8 million tonnes in the 1990.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis was followed by pulp and paper, at approximately five and four million tonnes, respectively.
Added 'respectively' for clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIt then slightly increased after this period but did not reach its previous peak.
Replaced 'chart-high' with 'peak' for clarity and corrected contraction.
Lexical resource
RevisedPaper production was lower than the other two until 1990, when it began to rise.
Corrected 'begin' to 'began' for grammatical accuracy.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedBy 2000, it had overtaken both timber and pulp, reaching nearly 12 million tonnes, making it the product with the highest growth.
Corrected 'overtook' to 'overtaken' for grammatical accuracy.
This figure started at around six million tonnes in 1980, then it slowly dropped to just over four million tonnes at the end of the period.
Lexical resource
RevisedConversely, pulp production followed a downward trend throughout the period.
Replaced 'bucked' with 'followed' for accuracy.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized with a clear overview and detailed comparisons. However, there are some abrupt transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words for smoother transitions.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the production of paper experienced a significant rise over the two decades, ultimately surpassing the other two products.
Added 'the' for specificity and clarity.
RevisedTimber showed smaller fluctuations and ended just below paper in production volume.
Replaced 'oscillations' with 'fluctuations' for clarity.
RevisedIn contrast, pulp production consistently declined over the period.
Added 'consistently' for clarity and emphasis.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but contains several errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis was followed by pulp and paper, at approximately five and four million tonnes, respectively.
Added 'respectively' for clarity.
RevisedIt then slightly increased after this period but did not reach its previous peak.
Replaced 'chart-high' with 'peak' for clarity and corrected contraction.
RevisedBy 2000, it had overtaken both timber and pulp, reaching nearly 12 million tonnes, making it the product with the highest growth.
Corrected 'overtook' to 'overtaken' for grammatical accuracy.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedTimber exhibited minor fluctuations and concluded slightly below paper.
Replaced 'oscillations' with 'fluctuations' for accuracy.
RevisedPaper production was lower than the other two until 1990, when it began to rise.
Corrected 'begin' to 'began' for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedConversely, pulp production followed a downward trend throughout the period.
Replaced 'bucked' with 'followed' for accuracy.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses all key features of the graph and provides a clear overview, but some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Provide more precise data points where relevant.
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