Timber, pulp and paper production: IELTS Task 1 answer #19, band 6.0
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The line graph this answer describes
Show the data
| Timber | Pulp | Paper | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1980 | 5 | 4 | 5.5 |
| 1985 | 10 | 6 | 7 |
| 1990 | 8 | 7 | 8 |
| 1995 | 6.5 | 8 | 9 |
| 2000 | 7.5 | 10 | 12 |
Academic Task 1213 words
The graph shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber pulp and paper from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart illustrates how three forest industry produce products in a European country, namely timber pulp and paper between 1980 and 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, paper, which accounted for the lowest figure and increased afterwards, was the first during the period, whereas pulp, which made up the largest figure at the beginning, dropped over the time period.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear which product is being discussed at each point, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Later, it grew rapidly in nearly 1997 and ended with 12 million tonnes. After that, there was a sharp rise after which it stood at about 7 million tonnes in 1985 and it kept going up, the figure accounted for almost 10 million tonnes in 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedTo begin with, paper, which was at 4 million tonnes in 1980, showed an upward trend, rising gradually until 1995, when it went down slightly and stood at about 9 million tonnes.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear that the upward trend is being shown in paper, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Lexical resource
RevisedPulp showed a downward trend, starting at almost 6 million tonnes in 1980 and falling quickly, reaching about 2.2 million tonnes by the middle of 1982.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is a starting point and a endpoint, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedLooking at timber, the figure increased from roughly 5 million tonnes to 10 million tonnes and reached its peak in 1985.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear that the figure being discussed is the amount of timber, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Lexical resource
RevisedNext, it steadily decreased and totalled nearly 6.5 million tonnes in 1995.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is decreasing steadily, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe figure increased until about 1997, reaching 8 million tonnes, and then declined by 0.3 million tonnes by the end.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is increasing, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected, but there are some areas where the flow of information could be improved. The use of cohesive devices is generally effective, but there are a few instances where they could be used more effectively to help the reader follow the information more easily.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all the information in the paragraph is relevant to that topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, paper, which accounted for the lowest figure and increased afterwards, was the first during the period, whereas pulp, which made up the largest figure at the beginning, dropped over the time period.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear which product is being discussed at each point, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedTo begin with, paper, which was at 4 million tonnes in 1980, showed an upward trend, rising gradually until 1995, when it went down slightly and stood at about 9 million tonnes.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear that the upward trend is being shown in paper, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedLooking at timber, the figure increased from roughly 5 million tonnes to 10 million tonnes and reached its peak in 1985.
This revision improves the flow of information by making it clear that the figure being discussed is the amount of timber, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the choice of grammatical structures could be improved.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, paper, which accounted for the lowest figure and increased afterwards, was the first during the period, whereas pulp, which made up the largest figure at the beginning, dropped over the time period.
This revision improves the choice of grammatical structures by making it clear which product is being discussed at each point, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedTo begin with, paper, which was at 4 million tonnes in 1980, showed an upward trend, rising gradually until 1995, when it went down slightly and stood at about 9 million tonnes.
This revision improves the choice of grammatical structures by making it clear that paper is the subject of the sentence, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedLooking at timber, the figure increased from roughly 5 million tonnes to 10 million tonnes and reached its peak in 1985.
This revision improves the choice of grammatical structures by making it clear what is being discussed, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where the choice of words could be improved.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPulp showed a downward trend, starting at almost 6 million tonnes in 1980 and falling quickly, reaching about 2.2 million tonnes by the middle of 1982.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is a starting point and a endpoint, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedNext, it steadily decreased and totalled nearly 6.5 million tonnes in 1995.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is decreasing steadily, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
RevisedThe figure increased until about 1997, reaching 8 million tonnes, and then declined by 0.3 million tonnes by the end.
This revision improves the choice of words by making it clear that the figure is increasing, and by using more effective cohesive devices.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview and makes appropriate comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making the comparisons more precise.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more specific details when describing the data.
- Make the comparisons more precise by using specific data points.
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