Cinemas by region: IELTS Task 1 answer #4, band 7.5
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192 words. Marked by Axiom on 19 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The table this answer describes
| 2004 | 2009 | Change (%) | |
|---|---|---|---|
| City centre | 1,512 | 1,620 | 7.14 |
| Near the city centre | 300 | 400 | 33.33 |
| Suburbs | 40 | 30 | -25 |
| Countryside | 108 | 90 | -16.67 |
| Total | 2,100 | 2,287 | 8.9 |
Academic Task 1192 words
The table shows the change the number of cinemas in different regions in a Europian country between 2004 and 2009
Lexical resource
RevisedThe table illustrates the changes in the number of cinemas across five regions in a European country from 2004 to 2009.
'Table graph' is redundant; 'table' suffices.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, with the exception of the Suburb and Countryside, all categories experienced an upward trend, albeit to varying degrees throughout the period.
Adding 'the' before 'Suburb' and 'Countryside' improves specificity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe City Center had the highest number of cinemas, while the Suburb had the lowest figure in both years.
Capitalizing 'City Center' and 'Suburb' for consistency with the table.
In 2004, the city center stood at 1,512 cinemas, which was the highest number among all regions.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis figure rose to 1,620 in 2009, marking a 7.14% increase.
Adding 'marking' for better grammatical accuracy.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe area near the City Center showed growth, starting at 300 cinemas.
Clarifying 'Near the city center' to match the table's terminology.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe figure gradually grew to 400 in 2009, representing the largest proportional increase of 33.33%.
Using 'representing' for improved grammatical precision.
This figure dropped to 30 in 2009, a decrease of 25%. The number of cinemas dropped to 90 cinemas in 2009, a 16.67% decline.
Lexical resource
RevisedRegarding the decreases, the Suburb experienced a downward trend, starting with 40 cinemas, which was the lowest number across all regions.
Improving sentence structure for clarity and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedSimilarly, the Countryside showed a gradual decrease, starting with 108 cinemas.
Capitalizing 'Countryside' for consistency with the table.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedDespite these reductions, the total number of cinemas across the regions rose from 2,100 to 2,287 between 2004 and 2009.
Clarifying 'regions' to match the context.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. It effectively summarizes the main trends and provides relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Include a brief conclusion to summarize findings.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, with the exception of the Suburb and Countryside, all categories experienced an upward trend, albeit to varying degrees throughout the period.
Adding 'the' before 'Suburb' and 'Countryside' improves specificity.
RevisedThe City Center had the highest number of cinemas, while the Suburb had the lowest figure in both years.
Capitalizing 'City Center' and 'Suburb' for consistency with the table.
RevisedDespite these reductions, the total number of cinemas across the regions rose from 2,100 to 2,287 between 2004 and 2009.
Clarifying 'regions' to match the context.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis figure rose to 1,620 in 2009, marking a 7.14% increase.
Adding 'marking' for better grammatical accuracy.
RevisedThe figure gradually grew to 400 in 2009, representing the largest proportional increase of 33.33%.
Using 'representing' for improved grammatical precision.
RevisedSimilarly, the Countryside showed a gradual decrease, starting with 108 cinemas.
Capitalizing 'Countryside' for consistency with the table.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately, with some minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe table illustrates the changes in the number of cinemas across five regions in a European country from 2004 to 2009.
'Table graph' is redundant; 'table' suffices.
RevisedThe area near the City Center showed growth, starting at 300 cinemas.
Clarifying 'Near the city center' to match the table's terminology.
RevisedRegarding the decreases, the Suburb experienced a downward trend, starting with 40 cinemas, which was the lowest number across all regions.
Improving sentence structure for clarity and coherence.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing the main features and making relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure all regions are consistently referred to as per the table's terminology.
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