Throwing away broken items: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 6.5

People are throwing away broken items instead of repairing them, in many parts of the world, while other argue that these items should be repaired and recycled. While this growing problem can be attributed to environmental problems and health complications, it could be tackled by public education and governments rules.

One predominant factor contributing to throwing away broken items is low cost of new alternatives. In an modern era, advanved technologies are becoming increasingly common in companies, which produce new items. Thanks to these technologies, they require less effort and time which may affect public trades and cost in local martkets. Because of these low cost items, people are throwing away items instead of repairing them. This problem may lead to even more serious repercussions, including environmental problems which may deteriorate air quality. Not only may less recycling affect air quality, but it may also negativly affect people's health, which may contribute to health issues such as lung cancer.

1. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedOne predominant factor contributing to this trend is the low cost of new alternatives in the modern era, where advanced technologies are becoming increasingly common in companies.

   The revised sentence provides a clearer connection between the factor and the context in which it operates.

2. Lexical resource

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   RevisedThe availability of low-cost alternatives has led people to throw away items instead of repairing them.

   The revised sentence provides a clearer and more formal explanation of the phenomenon, improving the overall quality of the essay.

To solve these issues, there are possible solutions. For one, governments should introduce new stricter rules. People who throw away items instead of recyling or repairing, they should be punished throw governments' laws. Passing a fine, for example, could be introduced to public. Because of these laws and costs of punishments, governments may mitigate the consequences of throwing away items in public spaces. For second, governments should facilitate the acquisition of environmental knowledge. It could be done throw advertising on TV screens, social media, in public lectures. Governments should make people understand the consequences of these actions, such as global warming, air pollution, and health complications. As a result, governments may encourage people to recycle and repair their items instead of throwing away.

1. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedThere are several potential solutions to address these issues.

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2. Lexical resource

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   RevisedIndividuals who dispose of items instead of recycling or repairing them should be subject to penalties under government regulations.

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3. Grammar & accuracy

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   RevisedFurthermore, governments should facilitate the acquisition of environmental knowledge.

   The revised sentence provides a more appropriate transition, improving the overall clarity and readability of the essay.

In conclusion, the predominant factors of throwing away items are low costs and modern technologies. To solve these problems, governments should introduce new stricter laws and provide people with environmental education, mitigating the effects of air pollution and health issues.

1. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedIn conclusion, the low costs of new alternatives due to technological advancements are the predominant factors contributing to this trend. However, with stricter regulations and increased public education, these issues can be mitigated.

   The revised sentence provides a more comprehensive conclusion, clearly linking the factors to the proposed solutions.