Rich and poor countries: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 6.5
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295 words. Marked by Axiom on 19 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2295 words
Rich countries are getting richer while poor countries are getting poorer. What is the cause of this? What could be done to solve this problem?
Although rich countries are getting richer, poor ones are falling behind, getting poorer. The major
reasons behind this trend is the lack of experts in poor nations, while the economy of rich countris is
greatly benefiting from large corporations and successful breakthroughs. Therefore, in order to adress
this problem, there are several effective measures that can be implemented by the authorities.
Poor
Lexical resource
RevisedThe main factors contributing to this phenomenon are the lack of skilled professionals and adequate funding.
The revised sentence uses more precise and formal language.
nations are struggling because of the poor economic state. As a result, many experts and well-educated
figures born in those poor countries often need to emigrate to developed nations in order to find a stable
job and achieve financial stability.
Numerous large
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, the growth in the economy of rich nations is what is leading to their increased wealth.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct explanation of the idea being presented.
corporations have been established in rich countries. For example, Google, Microsoft or McDonalds
have started their journay in those rich countries, paying a huge amount of taxes for the country and
benefit the economy. Furthermore, Many rich countries are willing to accept any experts and provide
them with the basic needs. This, in turn, attract and retain many experts from other countries.
One of them is to
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedGovernments in poor nations can take into account several solutions.
The revised sentence is more direct and clear.
improve the economy and the education system in poor countries. Governments in poor nations can
invest in the education, providing the young generation with new schools and new teaching methods to
ensure that children are learning effectively.
In conclusion, the lack of education and experts are the main reasons why poor nations are falling
behind while rich nations are greatly benefiting from dominant corporations. An effective solution would
be to invest in education, and consequently, improve the economy in poor countries
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the main points well, but the connection between different ideas could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. Clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph and more explicit linking phrases would help guide the reader through the essay. Ensuring consistent punctuation and spacing will also improve readability.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedTherefore, in order to address this problem, the authorities can implement several effective measures.
The revised sentence is more direct and clear.
RevisedOn the other hand, the growth in the economy of rich nations is what is leading to their increased wealth.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct explanation of the idea being presented.
RevisedGovernments in poor nations can take into account several solutions.
The revised sentence is more direct and clear.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures effectively, including complex sentences and passive constructions. However, there are some grammatical errors that could be addressed for clarity and precision. For example, "poor nations are struggling because of the poor economic state" could be rephrased as "poor nations are struggling due to their economic challenges."
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPoor nations are struggling due to their economic state.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward use of 'poor' to describe the economic state of the nation.
RevisedFurthermore, many affluent nations are willing to attract and provide for foreign experts.
The revised sentence corrects the improper use of 'any' and improves the overall flow and coherence of the sentence.
RevisedAn effective solution would be to invest in education, which would consequently lead to an improved economy in poor countries.
The revised sentence corrects the improper use of the conjunction 'and'.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, such as "emigrate," "financial stability," and "dominant corporations." However, there are some instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be refined for clarity and precision. For example, "journay" should be "journey," and "attract and retain many experts from other countries" could be rephrased as "attracting and retaining experts from other countries."
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe main factors contributing to this phenomenon are the lack of skilled professionals and adequate funding.
The revised sentence uses more precise and formal language.
RevisedFurthermore, many affluent nations are willing to attract and provide for foreign experts.
The revised sentence uses more precise and formal language.
RevisedIn conclusion, the disparity in education and expertise is a primary reason for the widening gap between poor and rich nations.
The revised sentence is more precise and formal.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons behind the wealth gap between rich and poor nations and suggesting potential solutions. The writer presents a clear explanation of the factors contributing to this disparity, such as the emigration of skilled professionals from poor nations and the dominance of large corporations in rich nations. The proposed solutions, such as improving the education system and the economy in poor nations, are relevant and well-explained. The essay could be further improved by providing more specific examples to support the arguments.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you fully develop your ideas and provide specific examples to support your arguments.
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