Online teaching replacing classrooms: IELTS Task 2 essay #1, band 6.5
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254 words. Marked by Axiom on 7 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2254 words
Educational institutions are replacing offline teaching technique with online teaching. Is this a positive or negative development?
Educational institutions are changing between offline teaching and online teaching method. Particularly online teaching more positive developement on saving both financial and timing for all people who study at institutions.
Moreover, online education is establishing for students to countinue their studies from home, and also take up online lessons from platforms like a Zoom.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedStudents pursuing offline education often face difficulties, such as the cost of travel to institutions located far from the city center, which can be a significant financial burden.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and concise explanation of the challenges associated with offline education.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn addition, students incur additional expenses such as accommodation and educational materials, including electronic devices, books, and notebooks.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent list of expenses associated with offline education.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAs a result, online education introduces a more convenient option for students to reduce their daily expenses.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and concise explanation of the benefits of online education.
Secondly, online teaching represent time management which students can also have intertainment options to learn a foreign language or other courses after the main lessons. As a result, online teaching method of instituations help people to manage their timing on educations and tasks.
Lexical resource
RevisedOnline studying gives them the flexibility to manage their free time and prioritize their interests, allowing them to focus on more productive activities.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
Lexical resource
RevisedFor example, working on projects allows students to brainstorm and enhance their educational skills in their spare time.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedOnline lessons from institutional professors also provide valuable opportunities for students to learn how to manage their time effectively across tasks and lessons.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and awkward phrasing in the original.
In conclusion, Institutions' educational methods changing from offline teaching to online teaching which is represent more positive developement for students on reduce financial expences and assist to time management
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the key points and reinforcing the central argument.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to link all the ideas in a paragraph to the main point of the paragraph.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedStudents pursuing offline education often face difficulties, such as the cost of travel to institutions located far from the city center, which can be a significant financial burden.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and concise explanation of the challenges associated with offline education.
RevisedIn addition, students incur additional expenses such as accommodation and educational materials, including electronic devices, books, and notebooks.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent list of expenses associated with offline education.
RevisedAs a result, online education introduces a more convenient option for students to reduce their daily expenses.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and concise explanation of the benefits of online education.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is a good range of structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that can be distracting. The essay attempts to use a variety of sentence structures, but there are some grammatical errors that can hinder understanding. These errors need to be addressed to improve the overall clarity and effectiveness of the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedEducational institutions are transitioning from offline to online teaching methods.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and grammatical errors in the original.
RevisedOnline teaching promotes effective time management, allowing students to engage in extracurricular activities such as learning a foreign language or taking other courses after their main lessons.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and awkward phrasing in the original.
RevisedOnline lessons from institutional professors also provide valuable opportunities for students to learn how to manage their time effectively across tasks and lessons.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and awkward phrasing in the original.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and precision.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOnline education is emerging as a viable option for students to continue their studies from home and participate in online lessons on platforms like Zoom.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
RevisedOnline studying gives them the flexibility to manage their free time and prioritize their interests, allowing them to focus on more productive activities.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
RevisedFor example, working on projects allows students to brainstorm and enhance their educational skills in their spare time.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the transition from offline to online teaching methods in educational institutions. The writer presents a clear position that online teaching is a positive development, offering benefits such as cost savings and flexibility in time management. However, the argument could be further developed with more specific examples and a deeper analysis of the potential drawbacks or challenges associated with online teaching in certain contexts.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Consider addressing potential counterarguments to strengthen your position.
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