Living without face-to-face contact: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 7.5

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287 words. Marked by Axiom on 5 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

Task 2287 words

In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

In the contemporary world, it has become increasingly possible to shop, work and communicate with others through the internet without any face-to-face interaction. While this trend offers significant convenience and efficiency, it also raises concerns about its impact on social relationships and overall well-being.

Admittedly, the ability to conduct daily activites online has greatly improved people’s lives. Firstly, it saves time and effort. For example, online shopping allows individuals to purchase goods from the comfort of their homes, avoiding long queues and crowded stores. Similarly, remote work enables employees to reduce commuting time and saving money, which can lead to better work-life balance. In addition, the internet has made global communication easier and faster. People can stay in touch with friends, family, and colleagues across the world via emails, messaging apps, and video calls. This is especially beneficial in maintaining long distance relationships and supporting international businesses.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedSimilarly, remote work enables employees to reduce commuting time and save money, which can lead to a better work-life balance.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and provides a more natural phrasing.

However, the lack of face-to-face interaction can have negative consequences. Human beings are social by nature and direct communication plays a pivotal role in building trust and sharing emotional connections. Without physical presence, people may feel isolated or disconnected, which can affect mental health. Anothern concern is that excessive reliance on the internet may reduce opportunities for social skill development, particularly amoung young people who grow up in a digital environment. For instance, many children today spend most of their time on social media or computer games, instead of acquiring knowledge at school, which can negatively affect both their academic performance and their ability to communicate effectively in real life.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOn the other hand, the lack of face-to-face interaction can lead to negative consequences.
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Lexical resource
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RevisedHuman beings, being inherently social, rely on direct communication as a crucial element in building trust and sharing emotional connections.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedWithout a physical presence, people may feel isolated or disconnected, which can impact mental health.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and provides a more natural phrasing.
Lexical resource
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RevisedAnother significant concern is that an excessive reliance on the internet may hinder the development of social skills, particularly among young people who grow up in a digital environment.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.
Lexical resource
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RevisedFor instance, many children today devote a majority of their time to social media or computer games, at the expense of acquiring knowledge at school, which can have a negative impact on both their academic performance and their ability to communicate effectively in real life.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.

To conclude although the internet has made life more convinient by enabling people to shop, work and communicate easily, it also poses challenges related to social interaction and emotional well-being.

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Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each discuss a single benefit or drawback, and a conclusion that restates your position. You use transition words effectively to guide the reader through your argument (e.g., "Firstly," "Similarly," "However," "To conclude"). For further improvement, you could ensure that the same idea or argument is not extended over multiple paragraphs to maintain a tighter focus and improve the overall cohesion.

Suggestions

Try to ensure that your ideas flow more smoothly from one to the next.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedAdmittedly, the ability to conduct daily activities online has been a significant improvement in people’s lives.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and more precise language.
RevisedOn the other hand, the lack of face-to-face interaction can lead to negative consequences.
The revised sentence provides a clearer contrast and more formal language.
RevisedIn conclusion, while the internet has made life more convenient by enabling people to shop, work, and communicate easily, it also presents challenges related to social interaction and emotional well-being.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more formal conclusion.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication. The essay showcases a variety of grammatical structures with a high degree of accuracy. Your sentence construction is varied and effective, helping to convey your ideas clearly and convincingly. Minor grammatical errors are present but do not significantly detract from the overall quality of your writing. To further demonstrate your grammatical range, you could experiment with more complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or passive voice, where appropriate.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedSimilarly, remote work enables employees to reduce commuting time and save money, which can lead to a better work-life balance.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and provides a more natural phrasing.
RevisedWithout a physical presence, people may feel isolated or disconnected, which can impact mental health.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and provides a more natural phrasing.
RevisedIncorporating a wider range of expressions and synonyms could keep the reader more engaged and reduce repetition.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and provides a more natural phrasing.

Lexical resource

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. You demonstrate a good command of vocabulary, with appropriate use of terms like "convenience," "efficiency," "pivotal role," and "isolation." Your use of language is clear and effective, contributing to a strong overall impression. To further showcase your lexical range, you could incorporate more varied expressions and synonyms to avoid repetition and keep the reader engaged.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedHuman beings, being inherently social, rely on direct communication as a crucial element in building trust and sharing emotional connections.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.
RevisedAnother significant concern is that an excessive reliance on the internet may hinder the development of social skills, particularly among young people who grow up in a digital environment.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.
RevisedFor instance, many children today devote a majority of their time to social media or computer games, at the expense of acquiring knowledge at school, which can have a negative impact on both their academic performance and their ability to communicate effectively in real life.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal phrasing.

Task response

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. You have clearly addressed the task, presenting a well-developed argument that considers both the advantages and disadvantages of the trend towards online activities. Your position is clear, and you provide relevant examples to support your points. However, the essay could be strengthened by providing more specific evidence or studies to back up your claims, particularly regarding the impact on social relationships and young people’s development.

Suggestions

Consider providing more specific evidence or studies to support your claims.

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