Impressive or practical buildings: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 7.0
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312 words. Marked by Axiom on 14 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2312 words
"Some argue that public buildings such as museums and galleries should be built primarily to impress and attract visitors, while others believe function and practicality should come first. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
However, some people believe that appearance of these buildings should be the main priority, others argue that their practicality is more important.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedPublic buildings such as galleries and museums often have beautiful external designs as they aim to attract visitors and create an impressive experience.
The revised sentence corrects the verb form and parallel structure.
Lexical resource
RevisedWhile an attractive design can bring many advantages, I believe that the practical function should be essential in the construction of these buildings.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal expression of the idea.
For example, an architecturally impressive museum may attract visitors who interested in art not only this, but also people who are curious about this building may come to take impression of this construction.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, an iconic appearance can bring numerous benefits by attracting both local and foreign tourists, as people are naturally drawn to beautiful places.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and more precise language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedA distinctive place can become a major landmark in a city, which can increase tourism and contribute to additional income for local businesses.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and grammatically accurate expression of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedFurthermore, such beautifully designed places can instill a sense of pride in residents and encourage them to appreciate art and culture.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and idiomatic expression of the idea.
Museums and galleries need sufficient exhibition space, adequate lighting and heating systems and overall, are those which make comfort for individuals.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, since public buildings are mainly designed to serve specific purposes, practicality should not be sacrificed for appearance.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise expression of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedIf museums excessively focus on unusual design and construction, the resulting buildings may require significant financial maintenance or be inconvenient for visitors.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and concise expression of the idea.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor example, an art gallery with a complex structure may look impressive, but it may be difficult to access basic facilities such as bathrooms or emergency medical services.
The revised sentence corrects the word choice and grammatical structure.
I believe that external appearance can not be primary consideration and convenience should be prior advantage of the public buildings.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, while an attractive design may appeal to more tourists and boost the economy and cultural identity, practicality should be the primary function of the building.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and logical conclusion to the essay.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the points you have made in the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the other hand, an iconic appearance can bring numerous benefits by attracting both local and foreign tourists, as people are naturally drawn to beautiful places.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and more precise language.
RevisedHowever, since public buildings are mainly designed to serve specific purposes, practicality should not be sacrificed for appearance.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise expression of the idea.
RevisedIn conclusion, while an attractive design may appeal to more tourists and boost the economy and cultural identity, practicality should be the primary function of the building.
The revised sentence provides a more coherent and logical conclusion to the essay.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPublic buildings such as galleries and museums often have beautiful external designs as they aim to attract visitors and create an impressive experience.
The revised sentence corrects the verb form and parallel structure.
RevisedA distinctive place can become a major landmark in a city, which can increase tourism and contribute to additional income for local businesses.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and grammatically accurate expression of the idea.
RevisedFor example, an art gallery with a complex structure may look impressive, but it may be difficult to access basic facilities such as bathrooms or emergency medical services.
The revised sentence corrects the word choice and grammatical structure.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedWhile an attractive design can bring many advantages, I believe that the practical function should be essential in the construction of these buildings.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and formal expression of the idea.
RevisedFurthermore, such beautifully designed places can instill a sense of pride in residents and encourage them to appreciate art and culture.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and idiomatic expression of the idea.
RevisedIf museums excessively focus on unusual design and construction, the resulting buildings may require significant financial maintenance or be inconvenient for visitors.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and concise expression of the idea.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more detailed examples to support your arguments.
- Make sure that you fully develop your arguments and explain your reasoning more fully.
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