Проверка IELTS Writing Task 1 онлайн
Проверьте отчёт Academic или письмо General Training по четырём критериям IELTS. Для Academic Task 1 добавьте график, и Axiom сверит с ним ваши цифры.
Ваши цифры сверяются с графиком
Без изображения сервис оценит ваш английский, но не цифры. С ним Axiom сначала читает график — категории, значения и тенденции — и оценивает отчёт по тому, что график показывает на самом деле.
- Вставьте задание и свой отчёт.
- Добавьте изображение: столбчатую, линейную или круговую диаграмму, таблицу, карту, план или схему процесса в формате PNG, JPEG или WebP до 5 МБ.
- Axiom считывает факты, затем проверяет отчёт по четырём критериям и предлагает правки ваших предложений.
Многие часто встречающиеся графики Task 1 уже известны Axiom, поэтому их факты готовы, даже если вы не загрузите изображение.
Как оценивается ответ Task 1
Те же четыре критерия, что и для эссе Task 2, только вместо Task Response — Task Achievement.
- Task Achievement
- Есть ли в отчёте ясный обзор, выделены ли ключевые особенности и верно ли приведены цифры. Для письма: раскрыты ли все пункты задания в тоне, который подходит адресату.
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Как вы группируете информацию и переходите от одной мысли к другой.
- Lexical Resource
- Слова, которыми вы описываете тенденции, сравниваете цифры и объясняете процесс.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Разнообразие и правильность предложений, включая сравнения и пассивный залог.
Счётчик слов показывает цель в 150 слов прямо во время письма.
Отчёт Task 1 с проверкой Axiom
Ответ Academic Task 1 с проверкой Axiom. Выберите выделенный фрагмент, чтобы увидеть, как его можно исправить и почему. Сам график здесь не приводится.
Academic Task 1305 words
The graph below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in five European countries from 2000 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of female members of parliament in five different countries between 2000 and 2012.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Germany recorded the highest proportion of female members of parliament on the graph, but it did not maintain its leading position by the end of the period.
The use of 'and' in the original sentence is not appropriate as it does not convey the contrast between the two clauses. The revised sentence uses 'but' to show the contrast.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedItaly had the lowest figure, but it experienced a considerable increase and reached the same level as the UK by the end of the period.
The use of 'with' after 'experienced' is not necessary and makes the sentence awkward. The revised sentence removes 'with' for a more natural flow.
In 2000, Germany had the highest proportion figure of female members of parliament compared with other countries, at just over 30% and it reached around 32% by the following four years. Spain had the second-highest figure on the graph with around 28% and its percentage increased noticeably until 2004 to around 36% before it declines slowly to 35% in 2008 same as Belgium. The figure for Spain declined slightly to exactly 35% by the end of the period.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAfter 2004, its figure remained stable at around 32% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the stability of the figure.
On the other hand, Belgium’s figure stood at 24% in 2000 and it rose considerably to 35% by the following 4 years. The proportion of female members in Belgium remained unchanged until 2008. By the end of the period, it recorded the highest figure compared to other countries. After 2004, the figure for Italian females increased sharply to around 23% in 2008. By the end of the period, the percentage stood at 23% percentage same as UK.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe UK did not experience a significant increase and it remained unchanged until 2004, after which the proportion of female members increased gradually to around 23% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the lack of change. The revised sentence also uses 'after which' to provide a clearer transition between the two clauses.
Lexical resource
RevisedItaly had the lowest proportion of female parliamentarians in 2000, with approximately 2%, and the figure remained stable until 2004.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more appropriate language.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
Что Axiom написал по каждому критерию: за что поставлен балл и над чем поработать дальше. Отчёт — на английском, как в приложении.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis of the data.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Germany recorded the highest proportion of female members of parliament on the graph, but it did not maintain its leading position by the end of the period.
The use of 'and' in the original sentence is not appropriate as it does not convey the contrast between the two clauses. The revised sentence uses 'but' to show the contrast.
RevisedItaly had the lowest figure, but it experienced a considerable increase and reached the same level as the UK by the end of the period.
The use of 'with' after 'experienced' is not necessary and makes the sentence awkward. The revised sentence removes 'with' for a more natural flow.
RevisedAfter 2004, its figure remained stable at around 32% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the stability of the figure.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a good control of grammar and punctuation. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis of the data.
- Be careful with punctuation and ensure that you use it correctly to avoid confusion.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and more complex language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and to avoid repetition.
- Be careful with word choice and ensure that the words you use are appropriate for the context.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedThe UK did not experience a significant increase and it remained unchanged until 2004, after which the proportion of female members increased gradually to around 23% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the lack of change. The revised sentence also uses 'after which' to provide a clearer transition between the two clauses.
RevisedItaly had the lowest proportion of female parliamentarians in 2000, with approximately 2%, and the figure remained stable until 2004.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more appropriate language.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a detailed analysis of the data and makes some comparisons between the different countries. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more comparisons between the different countries.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more comparisons between the different countries.
Вопросы
Какие задания проверяет Axiom?
Writing Task 1 и Task 2 для Academic и General Training. Для Academic Task 1 можно загрузить график, карту или схему; письма General Training оцениваются по тем же четырём критериям.
Зачем загружать график Task 1?
Без изображения Axiom оценит язык и структуру, но не сможет проверить цифры. С ним Axiom сначала считывает факты графика — категории, значения и тенденции — и затем оценивает отчёт по ним. Многие часто встречающиеся графики Task 1 уже известны Axiom, поэтому их факты готовы и без загрузки.
Сколько длится проверка?
Вы видите каждый шаг: Axiom читает эссе, оценивает четыре критерия и сохраняет отчёт. Если закрыть страницу, проверка продолжится, а отчёт появится в списке ваших отчётов.