IELTS Writing Task 1 tekshirish
Academic hisobot yoki General Training xatini toʻrtta IELTS mezoni boʻyicha tekshiring. Academic Task 1 uchun grafikni qoʻshing: Axiom raqamlaringizni u bilan solishtiradi.
Raqamlaringiz grafik bilan solishtiriladi
Rasmsiz tekshiruvchi ingliz tilingizni baholay oladi, lekin raqamlaringizni emas. Rasm bilan Axiom avval grafikni oʻqiydi — uning toifalari, qiymatlari va tendensiyalarini — soʻng hisobotingizni grafik aslida koʻrsatayotgan maʼlumotlar asosida baholaydi.
- Savol va hisobotingizni joylashtiring.
- Rasmni qoʻshing: ustunli yoki chiziqli grafik, doiraviy diagramma, jadval, xarita, reja yoki jarayon sxemasi; hajmi 5 MB gacha boʻlgan PNG, JPEG yoki WebP.
- Axiom faktlarni oʻqiydi, soʻng hisobotingizni baholaydi: toʻrt mezon boʻyicha, oʻz gaplaringiz uchun tuzatishlar bilan.
Koʻp beriladigan Task 1 grafiklari Axiomga allaqachon maʼlum, shuning uchun rasmni yuklamasangiz ham ularning faktlari tayyor.
Task 1 javobi qanday baholanadi
Task 2 insholari bilan bir xil toʻrt mezon, faqat Task Response oʻrnida Task Achievement turadi.
- Task Achievement
- Hisobotingizda aniq umumiy sharh borligi, asosiy jihatlar ajratib koʻrsatilgani va raqamlar toʻgʻri keltirilgani. Xat uchun: topshiriqdagi har bir band oʻquvchiga mos ohangda yoritilgani.
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Maʼlumotlarni qanday guruhlashingiz va bir fikrdan keyingisiga qanday oʻtishingiz.
- Lexical Resource
- Tendensiyalarni tasvirlash, raqamlarni solishtirish va jarayonni tushuntirish uchun tanlagan soʻzlaringiz.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Gaplaringizning xilma-xilligi va toʻgʻriligi, jumladan qiyoslash va majhul nisbat shakllari.
Yozish davomida soʻz hisoblagichi 150 soʻzlik maqsadni koʻrsatib turadi.
Axiom tekshirgan Task 1 hisoboti
Axiom baholagan Academic Task 1 javobi. Belgilangan parchani tanlang: uni qanday tuzatish mumkinligi va nima uchunligi koʻrinadi. Grafikning oʻzi bu yerda koʻrsatilmagan.
Academic Task 1305 words
The graph below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in five European countries from 2000 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of female members of parliament in five different countries between 2000 and 2012.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Germany recorded the highest proportion of female members of parliament on the graph, but it did not maintain its leading position by the end of the period.
The use of 'and' in the original sentence is not appropriate as it does not convey the contrast between the two clauses. The revised sentence uses 'but' to show the contrast.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedItaly had the lowest figure, but it experienced a considerable increase and reached the same level as the UK by the end of the period.
The use of 'with' after 'experienced' is not necessary and makes the sentence awkward. The revised sentence removes 'with' for a more natural flow.
In 2000, Germany had the highest proportion figure of female members of parliament compared with other countries, at just over 30% and it reached around 32% by the following four years. Spain had the second-highest figure on the graph with around 28% and its percentage increased noticeably until 2004 to around 36% before it declines slowly to 35% in 2008 same as Belgium. The figure for Spain declined slightly to exactly 35% by the end of the period.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAfter 2004, its figure remained stable at around 32% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the stability of the figure.
On the other hand, Belgium’s figure stood at 24% in 2000 and it rose considerably to 35% by the following 4 years. The proportion of female members in Belgium remained unchanged until 2008. By the end of the period, it recorded the highest figure compared to other countries. After 2004, the figure for Italian females increased sharply to around 23% in 2008. By the end of the period, the percentage stood at 23% percentage same as UK.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe UK did not experience a significant increase and it remained unchanged until 2004, after which the proportion of female members increased gradually to around 23% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the lack of change. The revised sentence also uses 'after which' to provide a clearer transition between the two clauses.
Lexical resource
RevisedItaly had the lowest proportion of female parliamentarians in 2000, with approximately 2%, and the figure remained stable until 2004.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more appropriate language.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
Axiom har bir mezon boʻyicha nima yozgani: ball nima uchun qoʻyilgani va keyin nimaga eʼtibor berish kerakligi. Hisobot ingliz tilida, ilovadagidek.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis of the data.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Germany recorded the highest proportion of female members of parliament on the graph, but it did not maintain its leading position by the end of the period.
The use of 'and' in the original sentence is not appropriate as it does not convey the contrast between the two clauses. The revised sentence uses 'but' to show the contrast.
RevisedItaly had the lowest figure, but it experienced a considerable increase and reached the same level as the UK by the end of the period.
The use of 'with' after 'experienced' is not necessary and makes the sentence awkward. The revised sentence removes 'with' for a more natural flow.
RevisedAfter 2004, its figure remained stable at around 32% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the stability of the figure.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a good control of grammar and punctuation. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis of the data.
- Be careful with punctuation and ensure that you use it correctly to avoid confusion.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and more complex language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and to avoid repetition.
- Be careful with word choice and ensure that the words you use are appropriate for the context.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedThe UK did not experience a significant increase and it remained unchanged until 2004, after which the proportion of female members increased gradually to around 23% by the end of the period.
The use of 'stayed' is not appropriate in this context. 'Remained' is a more suitable verb to describe the lack of change. The revised sentence also uses 'after which' to provide a clearer transition between the two clauses.
RevisedItaly had the lowest proportion of female parliamentarians in 2000, with approximately 2%, and the figure remained stable until 2004.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more appropriate language.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a detailed analysis of the data and makes some comparisons between the different countries. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more comparisons between the different countries.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more comparisons between the different countries.
Savollar
Axiom qaysi topshiriqlarni tekshiradi?
Academic va General Training uchun Writing Task 1 va Task 2. Academic Task 1 uchun grafik, xarita yoki diagrammani yuklashingiz mumkin; General Training xatlari ham oʻsha toʻrt mezon boʻyicha baholanadi.
Nega Task 1 grafigini yuklash kerak?
Rasmsiz Axiom tilingiz va matn tuzilishini baholay oladi, lekin raqamlaringizni tekshira olmaydi. Rasm bilan Axiom avval grafikdagi faktlarni — toifalar, qiymatlar va tendensiyalarni — oʻqiydi, soʻng hisobotingizni ular asosida baholaydi. Koʻp beriladigan Task 1 grafiklari Axiomga allaqachon maʼlum, shuning uchun ularning faktlari yuklamasangiz ham tayyor.
Tekshiruv qancha vaqt oladi?
Axiom inshongizni oʻqishi, toʻrt mezonni baholashi va hisobotni saqlashini qadam-baqadam kuzatishingiz mumkin. Sahifani yopsangiz ham tekshiruv davom etadi va hisobot hisobotlaringiz roʻyxatida paydo boʻladi.