A test for cyclists: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 7.0

Some might say that a license from authorities should be a requirement for cyclists to ensure public safety through a test. Although it would not seem as serious as driving a car, I do agree that specific evaluation tests should be implemented for riding a simple bike as well.

In a world where people are more self-aware of their actions and the effects of them towards environmental degredation, increasing usage of bikes are not uncommon, a mean of transportation with little-to-no negative impacts on the environment. These kinds of changes, that is why, usually come with upgrades to the system, as one might suggest to introduce test formats, allowing cyclists to study how to ride a bike safely in public places and test their overall abilities to do so, just like car drivers. Advocates who could support the idea of having no formal exams for bikers, would think riding a bicycle is by far the easiest activity a person can master individually. However, with the development of city infrastructure, governments are coming up with effective and brand-new road signs, as well as rules for every individual. In order to adapt these changes, bikers often feel the need for the help of educational testing centers, not because they want to learn how to ride a bike, but to get in-depth knowledge about the current system of road and how to follow it to ensure public safety.

1. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedIn a world where environmental awareness is increasing and the negative effects of our actions on the environment are a growing concern, the use of bikes, a low-impact means of transportation, is becoming more common.

   The sentence is a bit long and awkward. Breaking it up and using more precise language can improve clarity and coherence.

2. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedThese changes often lead to system upgrades, as has been suggested, perhaps leading to the introduction of testing formats that allow cyclists to demonstrate their knowledge of safe riding practices in public spaces, similar to car drivers.

   The sentence is a bit confusing and the word order is awkward. Rearranging the words and using more precise language can improve clarity and coherence.

Futhermore, based on the statistics done in many countries regarding the causes of congestions and previous road accidents, it has been found that cyclist were proportionally responsible for noticable part of these phenomenons. Individuals would take riding a bike less serious if they live in the countryside, areas with few transports on the road as opposed to urban areas. But in the city center where abundance of private cars as well as public transportation would ultimetely shift the standardized biking experience to a more complex one, when cyclists usually encounter difficult moments with either car or bus drivers. Initiatives such as testing facilities for cyclists could be the best solution to tackle these ongoing problems in the adaptation process. Once people are educated enough to act accordingly to the situation regarding road traffics or the ones that might be followed by serious accidents, they would have an upper hand to avoid these from happening, saving their physical and mental health altogehter.

1. Coherence & cohesion

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   RevisedFurthermore, statistics from many countries show that cyclists are significantly responsible for traffic congestion and accidents.

   The sentence is a bit long and the term 'proportionally responsible for noticable part of these phenomenons' is awkward and unclear. Simplifying the language can improve clarity and coherence.

2. Grammar & accuracy

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   RevisedIndividuals may take riding a bike less seriously if they live in the countryside, where there are few transportation options compared to urban areas.

   The term 'as opposed to' is used incorrectly and the verb 'take' should be followed by the gerund 'taking'.

In conclusion, although some people think that allowing cyclists on the road without demanding a pass from a test would give people more freedom, I, personally, believe that in the generation of constant improvements in the overall design of cities and their roads would eventually require authorities to imply certain rules on riding a bike.