Student rooms for one and for two: IELTS Task 1 answer #3, band 6.0
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152 words. Marked by Axiom on 5 May 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The plan this answer describes
Student room for two people, $350/week
- This room has two labelled beds and two labelled study desks.
- It is 6 metres by 4 metres and costs $350 per week.
Student room for one person, $200/week
- This room has one bed and one study desk.
- It is 6 metres by 2.5 metres and costs $200 per week.
Academic Task 1152 words
The plan below shows a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe diagram illustrates the layouts of two types of student accommodation: one designed for two people and another for a single occupant.
Clarifies the sentence and improves flow.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the main difference between the two rooms is their size, with the larger room offering additional facilities for two students.
Combines sentences for better cohesion and clarity.
In addition, while the single room costs 200 dollars, the double costs 350 dollars.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedTo begin with, the single-occupancy room is slightly narrower, measuring 6 metres by 2.5 metres, compared to the dual-occupancy room, which measures 6 metres by 4 metres.
Improves sentence structure and punctuation.
In the smaller room, there is a bed adjacent to the study desk, whereas there are two beds next to desks and there are two cupboards between them in the larger room. The cooking facilities are supplied in both shelters.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedBoth rooms are equipped with similarly sized bathrooms and each has one television.
Improves agreement and clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, the twin-share room includes a table and chairs, which are not present in the single room.
Clarifies the comparison and corrects the unclear phrase 'horner has not.'
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized with a clear overall structure. There is an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that describe the differences. However, some sentences are abrupt and transitions between ideas could be smoother. The conclusion is missing, and some ideas are not fully developed.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly.
- Add a concluding sentence to summarize the main points.
- Ensure each paragraph covers a clear aspect of the comparison.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe diagram illustrates the layouts of two types of student accommodation: one designed for two people and another for a single occupant.
Clarifies the sentence and improves flow.
RevisedOverall, the main difference between the two rooms is their size, with the larger room offering additional facilities for two students.
Combines sentences for better cohesion and clarity.
RevisedAdditionally, the twin-share room includes a table and chairs, which are not present in the single room.
Clarifies the comparison and corrects the unclear phrase 'horner has not.'
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as missing articles and awkward phrasing. Punctuation and agreement could be improved.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe diagram illustrates the layouts of two types of student accommodation.
Corrects the plural form to match standard usage.
RevisedTo begin with, the single-occupancy room is slightly narrower, measuring 6 metres by 2.5 metres, compared to the dual-occupancy room, which measures 6 metres by 4 metres.
Improves sentence structure and punctuation.
RevisedBoth rooms are equipped with similarly sized bathrooms and each has one television.
Improves agreement and clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The vocabulary is generally appropriate, with some attempts at variety. However, there are occasional awkward or incorrect word choices (e.g., 'horner has not'). Some repetition is present, and more precise language could be used.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedone designed for two people and another for a single occupant.
Improves clarity and avoids repetition.
RevisedMoreover, the larger room offers additional amenities to accommodate two students.
Uses more precise vocabulary and avoids informal language.
RevisedThere are extra tables and chairs in the twin-share room, which the single room does not have.
Corrects the unclear word 'horner' and clarifies the comparison.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the main features of the diagrams and makes relevant comparisons. However, some details are missing or unclear (e.g., the mention of 'bookshelf,' 'microwave,' or specific arrangement of facilities). The summary could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Include more details about the specific facilities in each room, such as the bookshelf and microwave.
- Clarify all comparisons and avoid ambiguous language.
- Add a summary sentence to reinforce the key differences.
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